Practice 6: peer- editing and self-editing

 My classmate´s paragraph:

We are so used to use our cell phones that we use them in any place at any time, not noticing we are ignoring everything else. Nowdays we always see friends at the bar using their phones instead of talking to each other, or a couple where one of them is using the phone and ignoring their partner. That is incredebly disrespectful, they are not paying attention to their friend, family member, partner or whatever just becouse they want to use their phone. We are loosing the capacity to talk to each other face to face. If you want to play with your cell phone stay at home, alone. If you go out, pay attention and listen to the people you are with, I´m sure they will appreciate it.

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My paragraph:

  By way of introduction, nowadays we have bad manners when we use the mobile phone, such as a using mobile phone when we are with family or friends. For instance, doing that we loss face to face conversations and it is a pity.Other reason that can afeccts our manners with mobile phone is using it while we are driving. The main reason that it is a bad manner obviously is the risk of having or causing an accident. Added to ir, using phone when you are at the table also is a very bad manner because you lose all the respect if you do it. However, there are people who is addicted to mobile phone and have a lot of bad manners but when you need them, they do not answer the phone and it is impossible to contact them. It's a huge contradiction that happens very often and I don not understand that. To sum up, we can assume that addiction to the mobile phone is common among the population and it is the cause of our lack of education with the use of mobile.

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